Post by Twilightstar on Mar 22, 2012 14:04:57 GMT -8
Okay So I am HORRIBLE at stories. Here are some of my warrior fan-fics or at least part of them. Tell me what you think and what I should do to make it better ^^
[glow=red,2,300]Story 1:[/glow]
A gray she-cat mewed fast “What are we gonna do! I don’t want her to live in lies”
A brown tom mewed simply “Well, We can pretend we died, and live as Rouges?”
The she-cat whined “But we can’t just leave her alone!”
The tom answered “Well, We ask Blackmoon to take care of her!”
The she-cat pouted “Okay then. I pretend to die first then you come back into camp tell everyone. You somehow pretend to die then we meet up at the four corners right?”
The tom nodded and the she-cat and tom padded back to Twilightclan…
[glow=red,2,300]Story 2:[/glow]
Lostkit wailed for her mother. A brown tom came in and whispered “Your family has died young kit” at the time Lostkit didn’t know what had happened. The brown tom picked Lostkit up and padded away from Lostclan. Lostkit was hungry and wailed loudly. The tom met a grey she-cat in the woods far from Lostclan. The tom mewed “her family died, and she is just a kit. Can you please help her?” The she-cat frowned “No” The tom sighed and padded away somehow knowing she wasn’t gonna help. He padded to a clan called Twilightclan, and waited for the leader to come. Twilightstar was about to go on a patrol and saw the tom, she rolled her eyes “Yes Darkfeather?” Lostkit wailed for her mother still, as Darkfeather explained “Lostkits family has died, my sister won’t help. Please help her!” his eyes desperate. Twilightstar glanced at the kit and nodded “Sure” she picked up Lostkit and took her to the Nursery. Darkfeather smiled, and padded away from Twilightclan. Lostkit kept wailing for milk. Twilightstar mewed “Winterbreeze, can you nurse Lostkit?” Winterbreeze nodded as Twilightstar put Lostkit next to her. Twilightstar mewed “She can’t know what happened to her family until she is an apprentice, Understood?” Winterbreeze nodded, as Lostkit found her way to her belly. Lostkit suckled, and soon fell asleep.
[glow=red,2,300]Story 3:[/glow]
A tiny kit with a black pelt wailed loudly, “Make him shush!” someone whispered.
“What are we supposed to do with him?” Another cat asked.
“We take him back to Twilightclan” A third cat said
“But Twilightstar They can’t know it’s your kit!”
Twilightstar growled “Then tell them, his mother died and we had to take him in!”
“But, But we can’t lie to them, What if he finds the truth?”
“He won’t, trust me” Twilightstar mewed, and they picked the kit up, the tiny kit wailed wanting milk. Twilightstar took the kit back to Twilightclan…
[glow=red,2,300]Story 4:[/glow]
Demonkit woke up and sighed as he padded out of the Nursery with everyone glaring at him. He growled at them and they ran away and continued with what they were supposed to do. Demonkit smiled. DemonDeathkit padded behind Demonkit and said “What do you wanna play?” Demonkit just shrugged. Brightkit padded out with uncertainty, she cringed when she heard Demonkit’s voice. Larkkit looked around as he padded out of the Nursery.
So yeah Please Rate each One.
1 Lowest
5 Highest
^^ This is so I know which one to finish in order
[glow=red,2,300]Story 1:[/glow]
Proulouge:
A gray she-cat mewed fast “What are we gonna do! I don’t want her to live in lies”
A brown tom mewed simply “Well, We can pretend we died, and live as Rouges?”
The she-cat whined “But we can’t just leave her alone!”
The tom answered “Well, We ask Blackmoon to take care of her!”
The she-cat pouted “Okay then. I pretend to die first then you come back into camp tell everyone. You somehow pretend to die then we meet up at the four corners right?”
The tom nodded and the she-cat and tom padded back to Twilightclan…
[glow=red,2,300]Story 2:[/glow]
Prolouge:
Lostkit wailed for her mother. A brown tom came in and whispered “Your family has died young kit” at the time Lostkit didn’t know what had happened. The brown tom picked Lostkit up and padded away from Lostclan. Lostkit was hungry and wailed loudly. The tom met a grey she-cat in the woods far from Lostclan. The tom mewed “her family died, and she is just a kit. Can you please help her?” The she-cat frowned “No” The tom sighed and padded away somehow knowing she wasn’t gonna help. He padded to a clan called Twilightclan, and waited for the leader to come. Twilightstar was about to go on a patrol and saw the tom, she rolled her eyes “Yes Darkfeather?” Lostkit wailed for her mother still, as Darkfeather explained “Lostkits family has died, my sister won’t help. Please help her!” his eyes desperate. Twilightstar glanced at the kit and nodded “Sure” she picked up Lostkit and took her to the Nursery. Darkfeather smiled, and padded away from Twilightclan. Lostkit kept wailing for milk. Twilightstar mewed “Winterbreeze, can you nurse Lostkit?” Winterbreeze nodded as Twilightstar put Lostkit next to her. Twilightstar mewed “She can’t know what happened to her family until she is an apprentice, Understood?” Winterbreeze nodded, as Lostkit found her way to her belly. Lostkit suckled, and soon fell asleep.
[glow=red,2,300]Story 3:[/glow]
Prologue
A tiny kit with a black pelt wailed loudly, “Make him shush!” someone whispered.
“What are we supposed to do with him?” Another cat asked.
“We take him back to Twilightclan” A third cat said
“But Twilightstar They can’t know it’s your kit!”
Twilightstar growled “Then tell them, his mother died and we had to take him in!”
“But, But we can’t lie to them, What if he finds the truth?”
“He won’t, trust me” Twilightstar mewed, and they picked the kit up, the tiny kit wailed wanting milk. Twilightstar took the kit back to Twilightclan…
[glow=red,2,300]Story 4:[/glow]
Part of Chapter One: Warning CREEPY
Demonkit woke up and sighed as he padded out of the Nursery with everyone glaring at him. He growled at them and they ran away and continued with what they were supposed to do. Demonkit smiled. DemonDeathkit padded behind Demonkit and said “What do you wanna play?” Demonkit just shrugged. Brightkit padded out with uncertainty, she cringed when she heard Demonkit’s voice. Larkkit looked around as he padded out of the Nursery.
So yeah Please Rate each One.
1 Lowest
5 Highest
^^ This is so I know which one to finish in order
